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Some believe in enrolling their children into the best schools so that they learn to socialize while others believe that homeschooling is a better option. Discuss both views and where do you stand on this topic?

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Education is the best dowery to a child what can easily
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 by parents. While some people think that enrolling their child
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 a popular college can give their child all the success with learning to co-operate with the society, others trust in letting them
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learn at home. I prefer it is better to schooling
children
 and in
this
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Firstly
, I would like to clarify why most of the parents including me prefer schooling
children
. The most probable answer to most minds come up is that the opportunity to
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 more experiences.
For instance
, students are able to co-operate with a variety of peers and adults.
Then
 they learn how to tolerate
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problems and how to accept things
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 are not familiar
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 them despite any complications. So, it will be a great chance to reward them as
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good human
being
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 in the future.
On the other hand
, some people believe that it is better to learn
children
 from home because they always worry about security more than enough.
Furthermore
, they are scared of the competition among compeers.
For example
, they prefer to make
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amount
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 of money
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 the teachers and do self-study classes at their own house with keeping eye on their
children
.
Then
 there will be nothing to worry about the protection and no race between companions at all.
Consequently
,
children
 are getting more sophisticated and they trust that they are the best.I think it is too dangerous to a growing mind and will be
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 beginning of so many problems. In conclusion, I think it is clearly described that attending young generation to a school to the best of parents' possibility is the best thing which can do on behalf of the
children
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learn alone at home.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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