Computers have made the world a better place to live in. Do you agree or disagree?

Computers

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have made the world a better place to live in. Do you agree or disagree? In the modern

world

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world,

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it is hard to imagine life without

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or smartphones. There are a lot of opinions about that topic. Some

people

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may say that

computers

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will make

humanity

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stupid in the future

and

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, and

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in some

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way

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kind

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they are right.

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my honest opinion,

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really

makes

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make

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humanity

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more stupid. But

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can`t agree that we don`t need to use them.

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Computer

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Computers

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can help everyone

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a lot of different things. On the one hand,

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computer

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a computer

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is a very useful thing.

People

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can make with it everything they want. With

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computer

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a computer

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we can

photoshoping

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photoshop

pictures, making videomontages, etc. Nowadays, even learning is hard to imagine without a

computer

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. There

are

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tons of information

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internet

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the internet

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that can be learned by humans.

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Also

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computers

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are helping

people

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with

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different

kind

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kinds

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of jobs,

such

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as factories or IT

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for

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example. They provide

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automation

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factories and workers don`t need to work so hard, as they did decades ago.

Programmists

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can even make a whole website or application just using

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computer

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a computer

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and

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. Thanks

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computers

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to computers

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humanity

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reached

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great progress since 2000.

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computer

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computers

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are our curse

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. Today, they are taking a great number of workplaces, where

previosly

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previously

people

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worked. If it keeps going like

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, a lot of

people

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will lose their jobs in future. In learning

comuter

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computer

is both: holy

graal

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grail

and

curse

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a curse

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Nowadays

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students

using

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use

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technologies

for doing

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to do

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their homework, but they don`t remember anything, because

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computer

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makes

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does

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homework

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the homework

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instead

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students

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the students

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. Even

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have that sin.

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would like to say that

computers

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can make

world

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the world

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better, but

equaly

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equally

, they

make

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also have

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bad

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a bad

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influence

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apply

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also

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. They have their advantages and disadvantages.

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Finally

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want to say that

humanity

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needs to teach how to use them without a bad influence on

themse

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themselves

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Sep 10, 2021

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task

Make your view clear in the first part and keep it steady through the essay.

coherence

Use one clear plan: agree, then give one or two reasons, and end with a short conclusion that matches your view.

coherence

Put one idea in each paragraph and add a small example for each.

grammar

Check grammar and spelling. Be careful with hard spell errors like 'photoshaping', 'videomontages', 'previosly'.

style

Use easy words and short sentences. Put a dot at the end of each sentence.

strength

You give ideas on how computers help in work and learning.

strength

You try to show both sides, not only pro or con.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

316 words

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