Some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness. Do you think that people can be happy without much money? What other factors contribute towards happiness?

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In a modern society majority of

people

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believe that in order to achieve

happiness

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individuals ought to be wealthy. From my point of view,

happiness

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can not be bought by paying for it. In

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essay, I am going to give my opinion on whether society is happy without

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or not and

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explain other suitable factors. Admittedly, in the present age, it is challenging to live without any

money

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. Rich

people

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can fulfil all of their family requirements and try to achieve everything by dedicating

money

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. They spend excessive

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on clothing, food, jewellery and luxury houses, owing yo

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they would be satisfied.

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, it is pretty difficult to live a comfortable lifestyle unless you have a means of fulfilment.

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money

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also

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dependent on obtaining

happiness

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, if poor

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get sick but do not have enough

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to buy necessary medicine, they would not be happy.

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, there are many

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who have a lot of

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but are unhappy. In light of the fact that

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they need to be recovered from an incurable disease, be together with relatives, they want to have children and suitable occupation. More specifically, you cannot return a person who died with your

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and

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, wealthy families not having children do not able to buy a child. In conclusion,

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finances play a vital role to provide for our economic needs, there are other factors that lead to

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such

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as being healthy, having parents and a loving family, having a favourite profession. These are much more valuable rather than

money

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Topic Vocabulary:

Promoting happiness
Essential factors
Financial stability
Material wealth
Personal fulfillment
Contentment
Basic needs
Maslow's hierarchy of needs
Social connections
Pursuing passions
Well-being
Mental health
Spiritual practices
Personal growth
Community service
Societal contribution
Philanthropy
Joy
Satisfaction
Prosperity

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Some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness. Do you think that people can be happy without much money? What other factors contribute towards happiness?

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Some think that residents should responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others say it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

Some people believe that newspapers are the best way to read the news. others, however, think that websites are better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The tabel below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relev