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Writing task one write a report for university lecturer describe the information show below

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The pie charts compare the percentage of
world
 spending,
world
population
 and consumption of
resources
. Overall, it is clear that the
number of
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population
 in Asia is the highest.
Also
, the proportion of
resources
 consumed in
USA
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the USA
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 and Europe is much higher than in other countries. As can be seen, the amount of food consumption is the highest, accounting for 24% of total
world
's spending.
This
 number is considerably higher
the
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than the
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 figure for clothing, at 6%.
On the other hand
, the
second highest
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 factor invested is transportation, with 18%, and a slightly lower
percent
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 of 12% spending for clothing.
Finally
, only 40% of spending for others which
is
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are
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 not mentioned in these charts.Asia has the highest
number of
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population
, accounting for 57% of
world's
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the world's
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population
. The
population
 of Europe and the USA is significantly lower, only 14% respectively.
However
, the figure for
resources
 that both areas consume is biggest, 60% compared to only 40% in the consumption of
resources
 in other regions. In terms of
population
 in Africa,
this
 area only accounts for 10% of
world's
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the world's
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population
 which outnumber two times the
population
 of other regions.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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