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The pie charts compare the percentage of
world
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 spending,
world
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population
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 and consumption of
resources
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. Overall, it is clear that the
number of
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population
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 in Asia is the highest.
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, the proportion of
resources
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 consumed in
USA
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the USA
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 and Europe is much higher than in other countries. As can be seen, the amount of food consumption is the highest, accounting for 24% of total
world
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's spending.
This
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 number is considerably higher
the
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 figure for clothing, at 6%.
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, the
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second highest
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second-highest
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 factor invested is transportation, with 18%, and a slightly lower
percent
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 of 12% spending for clothing.
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, only 40% of spending for others which
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 not mentioned in these charts.Asia has the highest
number of
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population
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, accounting for 57% of
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world's
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the world's
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population
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. The
population
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 of Europe and the USA is significantly lower, only 14% respectively.
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, the figure for
resources
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 that both areas consume is biggest, 60% compared to only 40% in the consumption of
resources
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 in other regions. In terms of
population
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 in Africa,
this
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 area only accounts for 10% of
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world's
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the world's
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population
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 which outnumber two times the
population
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 of other regions.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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