The qualities a person needs to become truly successful cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the top of the achievement a person's quality is enough no need to study at

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learners. In my opinion, for becoming successful in life quality is a big part because without

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, we can see lots of talent in our society and most of the time those talent shows some exceptional

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no academic degree but they are successful.

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both needed for reached to the station. Most of the time university and schools give proper

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type of institution hardly help to become successful in

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education

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system is modern so that it is easy for hard successful people.

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they offer many

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has a great impact on as

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the successful people come to our eye by some

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but it is not common but school and university has great impact. I feel that most of the time academic

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is important for us.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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324 words

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The qualities a person needs to become truly successful cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific world, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Employers should give their staff at least a 4-week holiday a year to help employees perform better in their jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that the government should spend more money in putting in more works of art like painting and statutes in cities to make them better places to live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

task 2: Some cities have vehicle-free days when private cars, trucks and motorcycles are banned from the city center. People are encouraged to use public transportation such as buses, taxis and metro on vehicle-free days. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?