Developed countries should help poor nations . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people claim that
encouragement
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of poverty
countries
should be assisting by wealthy nations.
However
, globalization must care about these nations starvation issues and it is essential for their exists.
Thus
, I strongly agree that assist them could make good international relations with them when it develops.
Firstly
, cuisine and medicine are
significant
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a significant
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determinant
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determinants
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of human
survive
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and depend on each other give many pros. Helping underdeveloped
countries
can lead to good ally between
nation
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nations
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and benefit both
countries
in many
aspect
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aspects
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. For
examples
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example
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, the country like
USA
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the USA
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, and many more helping scarcity
countries
such
as Africa to export their supply and water with condition that they have to grow some plants in the land of
village
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the village
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. African coffee is the obvious
of
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solution
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the solution
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to solve the problems and both gain advantage from it.
These product
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can be
auction
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an auction
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in
global
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the global
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market and give
a lots
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a lot
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of income.
Secondly
,
rescue
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the rescue
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of illness people in poorness
countries
receive
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receives
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knowledge and ability. Rarity disease mostly was found in
these country
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this country
these countries
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, so cure from developed
countries
can improve advance of technology in
medical
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a medical
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way. Some regions have no hospitals so doctors have been sent to help them. These make them more experience in primary patients and critical cases. In my opinion, it's important for
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the community
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community
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communities
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to help each other. Helping doesn't mean only give it
also
gain benefits together in economy and existence.
Lastly
, developed
countries
also
gain things in education way to progress the vaccine or medical innovation to prepare some ailment that might happen in own citizen in future.
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