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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Other say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, environmental problems occurred by the human action that causing climate change, one of the environmental problems is the decline of the population of both animals and plants. I believe that the loss of particular
species
 of plants and animals is not the most of the problem but it may be in the top ten of the environmental problem. In the present society, the development of technology is much better than in the past but it has to be exchanged with environmental degradation.
For instance
, the extinction of particular
species
, a lot of using fossil energy that caused the carbon dioxide, or destruction of the forest, etc.
Therefore
,
people
 should have awareness of the environment to maintain the supplement for our offspring in the future.
Moreover
, most
people
 think the worst thing caused by climate change was the low reproduction of some
species
 that make them near to extinct, but the other problems are
also
 important not less than the extinction of the
species
,
thus
, we have to cooperate with each country.
For example
, make the international laws that everyone has to be separated their rubbishes before throw away, the
people
 have to plant a plant on the roof of their houses like Singapore doing now, or the government has to give the awareness to their
people
 to maintain animals and plants. to conclude, no matter what the impact, we have to pay attention to it because every problem of the environment has affected everyone. So the international organisation should give the information about how the
people
 can be a part to help the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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