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People do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so, and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?

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In the past,
neighbours
 formed an essential part of
people
’s social lives and they helped each other in times of need. Nowadays
people
 often do not even know their
neighbours
 and as a
consequence
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 they live more isolated lives. In my opinion, getting to know one’s
neighbours
 requires time and energy, but the results will be hugely worthwhile. There are a number of reasons why we have less contact with our
neighbours
.
Firstly
, our lifestyles are more mobile.
This
 means that
people
 move house quite frequently and relationships tend to become more superficial.
Secondly
,
people
 often commute long distances to work.
This
 leads to them forming closer relationships with work colleagues than with their
neighbours
.
Finally
, modern lifestyles make us spend more time inside our houses on screens than in the local pub.
As a result
, we get fewer opportunities to build relationships within the community. There are many ways in which neighbourhood ties could be strengthened.
First
 of all, local authorities could provide more communal areas
such
 as playgrounds and community halls so that there are places where
neighbours
 can meet and make friends.
In addition
, I think that when new
people
 come to a street, the local residents should make more of an effort to introduce themselves and welcome them.
Lastly
,
people
 could set up neighbourhood associations that meet regularly to discuss the things which affect them. Admittedly, these suggestions require a great deal of time and effort, both of which seem to be in very short supply in
this
 day and age.
Nevertheless
, I strongly believe that the community spirit is still alive and just needs a push in the right direction.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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