in many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

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modern society, while some people prefer sending their toddlers to co-institutes or
schools
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gender, others believe that it would have more drawbacks to the future of a child. I totally disagree with the
first
half of
parents
and strongly agree with the latter part.
Firstly
, if I would say why I disagree with
parents
who are willing to send their children to one-sex
schools
or co-educational institutions
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because the unavailability to interact with the opposite gender in childhood may cause some bad effects in the future;
moreover
, that could be lead to defeat all the goals and expectations too.
For example
, when a girl grew up and became young, if she has not ever co-op with a peer boy, perhaps she will tend to think that the
first
boy she meets is the best person in the world and a hero;
however
, it does not the reality. She will be cheated by him easily and he will be able to drag her life into a
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situation.
Therefore
using
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schools
or co-educational
schools
will not be a good decision to be taken by
parents
.
On the other hand
, a part of our society
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that there would have many drawbacks of keeping their toddler in a
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college to his or her future endeavours. I strongly agree with them because I always believe that companions should not be
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the same gender.
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, whenever
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both boys and girls are in
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same classroom the competition among them will be improved inevitably and it will be encouraged both types of gangs to do their studies hard. In a
single sex
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school
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there is no allure like that. To sum up, it is clearly described why I totally accept
parents
who believe unisex
schools
are the best and who think
otherwise
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more drawbacks.
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