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People, in some countries, prefer to have a fast and extensive rail transportation system while others think that improving the existing road transportation system is far more important and that is why more budget should be spent on roads. This essay discusses both views. Personally, I am in favour of developing and enhancing both.

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Introduction
People
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, in some countries, prefer to have a fast and extensive rail transportation
system
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 while others think that improving the existing road transportation
system
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 is far more important and
that is
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 why more budget should be spent on roads.
This
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 essay discusses both views. Personally, I am in favour of developing and enhancing both.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand,
people
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 in favour of having a speedy and reliable
train
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communication
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system
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 mainly base their ground on the fact that trains can carry a large number of passengers and goods at a time and can remarkably reduce traffic congestion. Rail
communication
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 is safer, faster and can connect cities and towns that build a better connection than the conventional road
transport
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system
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, according to these
people
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.
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, locomotives are already famous in many countries and have greatly improved communications there. Due to
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 advantages,
people
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 often opine that more money should be allocated for constructing new fast
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 lines.
For instance
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, the
train
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system
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 in China and Russia both have a groundbreaking contribution to improving their overall
communication
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 systems and many countries have started adopting
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 model.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, the public
transport
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system
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 plays an essential role in interconnecting the different parts of the cities and most
people
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 use
this
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system
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 to travel to different places. Though trains can improve the city
transport
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 facilities, it is not an alternative to the existing road transports.
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 why many
people
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 believe that the national budget should be utilised on improving public
transport
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 for the sake of better
communication
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 for mass
people
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.
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, the
train
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 line in the UK has always contributed to a great extent to the overall
transport
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system
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 in the country.
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, public
transport
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 has always been the main commuting mode for UK citizens.
Conclusion
To conclude, I believe that the national budget should be fairly distributed for the improvement of the fast and new rail
system
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 as well as public transports for the overall expansion and improvement of the transportation
system
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 in a country.

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