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In some parts of the world it is becoming popular to research the history of one’s own family. Why might people want to do this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Exploring
one’s
 family background and
history
 is becoming increasingly popular in numerous countries around the world. In my opinion, through research and knowing more about
one’s
 family,
people
 can see common trends passed through
generations
 and useful information which can only be seen as beneficial for
people
’s future.
Firstly
, some
people
 look into their family
history
 in order to discover any common trends with family members of a previous generation.
This
 can be especially so with
people
 who have particular skills, gifts or interests in uncommon fields.
In other words
, as some gifts and skills are hereditary, it can be interesting for
people
 to learn how many others in their family shared these talents from previous
generations
. Another reason for the popularity of finding out about
one’s
 family
history
 is often due to general curiosity of
one’s
 geographical origins.
That is
 to say, some families moved abroad, away from their own country,
generations
 ago which resulted in them losing their original culture and adopting the culture of the country they moved to.
Therefore
, through research,
people
 can learn more about their country of origin and understand more about the culture that their family originally came from.
Finally
, the trend of researching family
history
 is certainly beneficial and can help
people
 find their place in the world. Some
people
 feel a lack of direction in life or are dislocated from others but
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learning more about their past family
history
, it can help them relate to the world and feel more comfortable about who they are. Take,
for example
, a person who feels nervous about making a certain choice in life, they may feel comforted by knowing that others in their family made the same choice many
generations
 ago. In conclusion, it can be advantageous for
people
 to learn more about the family’s background and origins. It would be useful for children to learn about their own family
history
,
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 if
this
 was incorporated into the school curriculum.
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