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Fast food is a part of life in many places and as a result, this leads to bad effects in lifestyle and diet. To what extent do you agree?

Fast
food
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 has become a common part of daily life in many countries.
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, many
people
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 believe that it has negative effects on
lifestyle
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 and diet. I strongly agree with
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 view. One major reason is that fast
food
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 is often high in fat, sugar, and salt. Regular consumption of
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food
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 can lead to serious health problems
such
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 as obesity, heart disease, and diabetes. Because fast
food
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 is cheap, tasty, and easy to access,
people
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 tend to choose it
instead
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 of healthy home-cooked meals. Over time,
this
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 habit reduces the intake of fruits, vegetables, and other nutritious foods, which are essential for a balanced diet.
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, fast
food
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 encourages an unhealthy
lifestyle
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. Many fast-
food
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 meals are eaten quickly or
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 sitting for long periods,
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 as in front of the television or at work.
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 reduces physical activity and promotes a sedentary
lifestyle
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.
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, busy schedules and long working hours make
people
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 rely more on fast
food
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, which strengthens unhealthy eating patterns and limits time for exercise.
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, it can be argued that fast
food
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 is not always harmful if eaten occasionally. Some fast-
food
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 restaurants now offer healthier options,
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 as salads and low-calorie meals.
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, these options are often ignored, and most
people
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 continue to choose high-calorie foods. In conclusion, I strongly agree that fast
food
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 has a negative impact on both
lifestyle
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 and diet.
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 occasional consumption may not be harmful, regular reliance on fast
food
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 can seriously damage
people
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’s health and
overall
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 quality of life.

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general improvement
The essay keeps a clear view and answer to the task. To go higher, use more clear facts or small facts as proof.
structure
Put one main idea in each paragraph, then add details to support it.
language use
Use more linking words and keep grammar clear so the read feels smooth.
task response
Clear view and full answer to the question.
coherence
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