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the advantages and disadvantages of being a vegetarian

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In recent years , being a vegetarian has become trendy and a lot of people started to opt for natural food resources derived from plants rather than animal products. Not only to avoid harm to animals, but
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 to have a healthier
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 themselves.
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, many disagree and find it too extreme to abstain from eating all animal products as they constitute the overwhelming majority of their
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. Indeed , a vegetarian
diet
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 is a healthier option as it
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 proven time over time through research that it leads to a significant drop in cardiovascular disease and diabetes risk. Equally important, is the fact that it helps
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 athletic performance with the likes of Michael Phelps and Lionel Messi utilizing it to improve their performances. Another example is Irina Shayek a famous model who , in a recent interview , mentioned that she is following a strict vegetarian
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 to help her maintain a constant weight and
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glowing skin.
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, opposing views allege that the
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 is simply too hard to stick to and claim that it is simply impossible for them to stop eating eggs and bacon for breakfast.
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 , a lot of them firmly believe that a vegetarian
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 would harm their protein intake
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 it has been proven again and again that
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 is not true.
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 , a vegetarian
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 is most definitely the healthier option .
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 , it is difficult to adhere to. The way I see it , moderation is the answer if we can collectively decrease our intake of animal products we can make a profound difference.
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task response
The essay adequately responds to the prompt, presenting both advantages and disadvantages of being a vegetarian. However, the conclusion could be more decisive.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is generally clear, but the conclusion could be more closely tied to the rest of the essay.

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