"Prevention is better than cure." Researching and treating disease is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree.

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I participated in various competitions
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I took 1st and 3d places in the Chess Competitions. I got interested in technical and
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I figured out how to solve Cube Rube and completed the German course” -SOLO:Touch Typing Tutor''.
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where I discovered my passion for the
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and acquired a passion for making things. Later seeing my progress in lessons , my teachers even advised me to enter the Physics and Mathematics Lyceum which is prestigious in
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, I was not going to give up so easily, because I still really liked mathematics and physics.
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universities
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engineering, I didn’t want to give up my art passion . When I was a little kid I thought engineering is like math and
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is art, but at that moment I felt that the two could be combined into a very hands-on
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. So I searched for information thoroughly and found out about the departure called
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engineering.I was so motivated to
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extremely necessary for
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engineers.I practised solving different problems in the free platform called “Codewars” It helped me a lot to raise my
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in
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science. All programmes used
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versions, I immediately decided to practice my
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.I started to work as a teacher of
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teaching
english
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-speaking foreigners in tutor platform Preply, teaching
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from different countries and improving my
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academic speaking abilities at the same
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. Now I would love to introduce to you my ambitions and explain why I am literally on fire with an idea to
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in South
Korea
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:I knew since childhood that I wanted to help
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in the
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by creating new things which could make their lives more comfortable. Let’s start with density, which is really expensive these days. Living in
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,my family and I often encountered situations when we expected a high
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dental treatment.
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’s money and nerve system. Another topic bothering me is the
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construction of houses.Here it is rather low-
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.Having entered
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in Moscow, I moved to a dormitory
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students. It turned out that they are of the worst
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. Since the climate in
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is rather harsh, it was almost impossible to live in dorm rooms: in winter it was so cold that I had to wear a jacket indoors, and in summer it was so hot that not even a conditioner could save me from the heat.
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, waking up every day in their apartment, felt happy. I realized that
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two fields. And I began to look for regions / countries in which the government gives an important role to the
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of
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, because it was important for me to know that I will
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in an environment where I would have the opportunity to fully realize my
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ideas
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(described in the
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plan) , using to the maximum of possible opportunities. After it turned out that South
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is in the 2nd place in the development of industrialization
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universities
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have the potential to provide me with all the necessary resources and
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, since I have been interested in South
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culture for a long
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as a promisingly developing state (especially in technology), which can give me not only all the necessary
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in the
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of
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engineering but advanced opportunities with my
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employment.
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design
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buzzwords are mostly solidity,
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, innovation, aesthetics and latest technology, minimalism. precision. Unfortunately my
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to enter south
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universities
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until I found Inje
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with my desired departure “
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engineering”. I found out that Inje
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provides not only an educational set of courses which were perfect for me but
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it possessed a space called “Dream Factory Center '' where I could implement all of my
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. I was so amazed that the machines were available for free and I had an opportunity to make things in my head in actual objects.It is
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so it is even possible to create a prosthetic hand with a 3d printer in there. I subscribed to their channel on youtube called “인제대학교드림팩토리센터'' and watched a planty of videos about an organization of work in there. I was beyond thrilled by the opportunities suggested in
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devices to improve the cost and
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of density. 3D printing is extremely prospective and can reduce the costs associated with product development by minimising the amount of labour needed to produce models, tooling and prototype parts. My 3D printing works will help professionals and doctors to learn and improve their
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, practice and draw up accurate plans for surgical operations more efficiently.
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of treatment will grow significantly.I will start with testing my projects in South
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and after completing my education there I will continue spreading my
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works in
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. My final goal is to decrease the cost of density by 3 times.Thereby no longer anyone will need to take a toothbrush with themselves all the
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and create something new. I am incredibly inspired and well-motivated by
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and
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to implement breakthroughs and improve our
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it will allow me to share my experience with other
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from
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interested in
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engineering about education in South
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and demonstrate my
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achievements to the
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42 , a private, nonprofit and tuition-free
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programming
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and after studying for 1 year I will transfer to campus in Seoul. There I will develop
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engineers key
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as strong math and IT
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and problem solving and do my own projects and earn enough money for studying in a
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university
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or apply for
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engineering internships to acquire other necessary
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and start to accomplish my
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in real life.
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