Some people think in the modern society individuals are becoming more dependent on each other, while others say that individuals are becoming more independent of each other.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

We live in a world, where everybody wants to live their
life
, the way they want, and there is nothing wrong with it. Some people think that individuals are becoming more independent of each other , while some folks think exactly the opposite of
this
statement. I am going to discuss both views in the following paragraphs and
also
going to give my own opinion on
this
topic.
To begin
with, Some people think that living alone and not depending on anyone can make a person's
life
. They think that after entering adulthood it's good for them to start living their own
life
in their own conditions, where no one can object to their decisions. Especially, people from big cities live that way. According to
survey
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, 78
percent
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of adults leave their home after passing 18th birthday, which is common in
this
world, and
also
their
parents
encourage them to take responsibilities
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their own hands so that they can lead their
life
the way they want.
On the other hand
, Some folks like to live their own
life
with their beloved one's, which is fine because we all have the power to choose, whatever we want in our lives.
Hence
, because of
this
they basically depend on their families, emotionally and financially.
Moreover
,
life
is not the same for all of us, some can live alone and like to live alone, while others are more
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and they choose to stay with their
parents
. They feel comfortable and always seek help from their
parents
for important decisions that can make or break their
life
.
Last
but not least, According to
me
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, both ways are fine to lead a successful
life
. Moving forward, I still live with my
parents
or indirectly we can say that I most of the time depend on them for financial aid or during my bad times I like to be present around my family for emotional help and depending on family or friends is not wrong.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalized economy
  • collaborative work environments
  • crowd-sourced
  • empowered
  • perception
  • availability
  • autonomy
  • reliance
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