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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is rightly said that being happy does not always mean that a person is wealthy.
Happiness
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 is something that energizes our minds and gives us real joy.Some people opine that cheerfulness opens its arms in front of rich people. But it is not true.
Money
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 can be used to buy luxuries but it does not assure us to enjoy these expensive luxury items. I do believe that the real joy lies between satisfaction and simplicity. To initiate with, there are multifarious factors by which an individual feels happy without having much
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.
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,when a human being helps others who are in need,it creates a chain reaction of positive thoughts.He feels satisfied with his inner soul.It
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 gives joy to the beholder.
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,a person considering liberty as a social contract rather than a personal affair, less chaos is created. Which
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 results in a better human to human understanding adding to
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 .
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,when it comes to family's issues which can be of any kind like financial or emotional, they must be dealt with proper understanding and care they will
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 result in
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. Eventually,if the needs are minimized
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 all the issues will be resolved on their own. There will be no lust for earning more which will add to the alleviation of negativity and stress. On the flip side,it is an undeniable fact that
money
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 is essential to make both ends meet.But the notion which describes wealth as a prime factor for joyful
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 seems to be meaningless. A person can buy a luxury bed, an expensive quilt, a highly facilitated room but he cannot buy a sound sleep. The same applies in the case of
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. Napoleon was a famous personality but at the end of his
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life
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 he confessed that he had never enjoyed even six single days of
happiness
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 in his whole
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. He was too rich to buy everything.
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, Helen Keller, who was blind, deaf and dumb from her childhood found
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 as the greatest blessing of God. Laconically, it can be inferred that as a famous aphorism stands "
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 makes the mare go", it can be considered right to some extent.
Money
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 is something but not everything. True
happiness
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 resides in our good actions and our decisions not in wealth. So we should always try to be just in our actions which will
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happiness
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