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Band 6.5

You have a permanent job, and few weeks ago you have started a part-time short course. You are not satisfied with it and want to change this part time course. Write a letter to your professor explaining - What you are writing about - why you are not satisfied with your present part-time course, and stating which course you would prefer and why

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to you regarding the change of current part time
course
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. The reason for the dissatisfaction with the
course
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 is it does not align with my interest. I
initially
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 thought it would be the best
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 for me
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 after attending two classes I realized that it is not suitable program for me as my aspiration is to pursue masters in arts.
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, the class schedule is conflicting with my permanent job timing.
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,
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 is another reason. I would like you to request a change in my
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. I would like to get enrolled in Arts
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. Please inform me if you have any spot left or you can defer my application for next year. Thankyou for your time. Sincerely, Robin

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas into clearer paragraphs that each focus on a single topic. For instance, start with your dissatisfaction, then discuss the new course, and end with your request.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use appropriate connectors to improve the flow of your writing, such as 'Furthermore' to add another reason or 'In addition' for supplementary information.
task response
Ensure that your request for course change is clearly stated, and provide a bit more detail about why the Arts course aligns with your goals. This would enhance your task achievement.
task response
While the tone is generally polite, a few phrases could be more formal, such as 'I am writing to request' instead of 'I would like you to request.'
greeting and closing
Your letter has a polite greeting and closing, which is appropriate for formal communication.
complete response
You clearly express your main point of dissatisfaction, which is a key aspect of task achievement.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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