It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Transit to distant natural
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is achievable by researchers and
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at the moment,
for instance
, the South Pole. While there are considerable merits to
this
advancement, I believe the drawbacks are ubiquitous.
To begin
with, there are endless possibilities of exploration of the uncharted. With the help of
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technological advancements,
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scientists and explorers can uncover the hidden mysteries which will help them iron out the complexities of
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era.
For instance
, what if they find a bacteria or virus which can be modified to invent a cure for HIV or Cancer?.
Besides
, deep exploration can lead to not only a cure but
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can help reveal a plethora of undiscovered species.
Moreover
, natural minerals and materials can be discovered by delving deep into the earth.
Secondly
,
such
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environment can contain some major demerits. Safety is the biggest concern for
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scientists and
travelers
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. If the surroundings are toxic and hazardous, it can put them in harm’s way.
For instance
, volcanic eruptions, emission of methane gas, acid rain and so on. Apart from that, even if they managed to reach the forbidden door, there is no guarantee they will not unintentionally harm
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nature. Because of the voracious nature of
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, It is evident that substantial damage has been done to nature,
such
as massive deforestation or water contamination due to mankind’s lack of environmental awareness. To summarize, due to the obscure involvement of risks are far greater than the safety, I believe the hindrance
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more significant than the possible benefits for the mentioned reasons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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