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he rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, to chase after the growth of the economy, processed meal plays an important role in our daily lives as people have less
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 to spend on cooking.
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 essay will discuss its benefits and drawbacks. On one hand, the fast-paced routine every day keeps us busy more than ever, and convenience foods help us to save more
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 to rest. A proper meal would take up to one hour to prepare and cook. That has not even plus the
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 we have to scan through the grocery store and line up to check out. But for ready food, it might take less than 5 minutes to be on the table.
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, it is very convenient to heat up a meal at a very reasonable price at any 7Eleven store.
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, pre-made food could have preserving chemicals, and a lack of nutrients, which are bad for human’s health. To keep the snack
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 longer on those shelves, ingredients must go through a long process with artificial chemicals. In another case, fast food is addictive, but it always has a lot of oil, carbs, sugar, but most of the
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 it does not have enough good protein and fresh vegetables.
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, every McDonald's meal will come with a can of soda and an extra big fries package. In conclusion, the disadvantages of
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 trend are more than its benefits. Packed foods offer us
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 to deal with busy lives. But a freshly cooked meal with the family brings us the value of life. People should spend more
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 balancing their diets to have a healthy body.
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