In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

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The given pie charts demonstrate the general benefits and drawbacks based on visitors’ views. Overall,

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, the most disadvantage of Bowen islands is that value of living here was expensive ,whereas the local people of the

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place. As far as downsides of Bowen islands is concerned, high cost of living dominate pie chart , undertaking 50

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caused disapproval of visitors, taking 25

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, the local people are approved by visitors and

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. The scenery of

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visitors and it took 35

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. Quality of

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In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

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