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In some countries today, there is an attitude that ‘anyone can do it’ in the arts – music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

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The given pie charts demonstrate the general benefits and drawbacks based on visitors’ views. Overall,
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 visitors’ point of
views
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, the most disadvantage of Bowen islands is that value of living here was expensive ,whereas the local people of the
island
 is considered as the most beneficial aspect of
this
 place. As far as downsides of Bowen islands is concerned, high cost of living dominate pie chart , undertaking 50
percent
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.
Besides
, lack of entertainment facilities
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 caused disapproval of visitors, taking 25
percent
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, while weather of
island
 and food quality took respectively 15 and 10
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. With regards to
positive
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 side of
island
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, the local people are approved by visitors and
this
 aspect took 42
percent
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 of
charts
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. The scenery of
island
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 is the
second
 issue that made
best
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 impression
for
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 visitors and it took 35
percent
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. Quality of
accomodation
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accommodation
 and
culure
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culture
 of
island
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 are
satisfaied
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satisfied
 by guests, relatively 11 and 12
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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