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In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, thanks to globalization, multinational
companies
 are increasing their power and they are becoming more
influent
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 in modern society, as a consequence that some
people
considere
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consider
this
 trend as negative with potential damage for the community. In
this
 essay, I am going to explain the reason why I strongly disagree with the statement.
Firstly
, I think that
biggest
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companies
 in the world have
a
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huge power in influencing
people
 and not only their
coustumer
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customer
customers
,
for example
, if a multinational develop
a
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new software for improving the features of mobile phone,
all the
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but all the people also
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people
 take advantage
from
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this
 resource and other
companies
 will try to copy for making
profit
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.
Moreover
, in my opinion, I believe that
these kind
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these kinds
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 of company made up one of the biggest
contibution
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contribution
 to the economy due to the fact that they hire several
people
 for
prividing
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providing
 services,
for instance
, if we think about all the Apple
store
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stores
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 we will be
surpise
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surprise
 about the number of
employes
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employees
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 who work there.
Although
 some
people
 argued that multinational could be a dangerous trend, others believe that thanks to globalisation we can buy whatever we want with a
few
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little
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 money, in fact, industrial
pruduction
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production
 allow us to purchase products that we can not afford if they
is
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are
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 made by an
artigian
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artisan
Artinian
. In conclusion, as I said, multinational
companies
 could be a great
oppurtunity
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opportunity
 for modern society in light of the fact that several
people
 can work for them and
in
addition
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 they
contributes
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 to
develop
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developing
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 the economy
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, therefore,
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therefore
people
shuold
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should
 not be scared about their power or their influence in government’s decisions.
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