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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Residing in a foreign nation can lead to alarming social issues,
similarly
 practical downfalls, especially when an individual is not able to speak its native
language
. I totally agree with
this
 notion.
This
 essay will discuss in the
first
 paragraph, how
people
 become isolated and in the
second
 paragraph, how they face difficulty in communication.
Firstly
, aloneness arising from feeling isolated can cause a devastating mental illness called 'depression'.
In other words
,
people
 who don't know a foreign
language
 are often unable to form social groups, make friends and express their feelings. Eventually, no more parties, no companions cause sadness to set in.
In addition
 to
this
, residents face problems
such
 as difficulty in getting domestic help.
Moreover
, finding a groom or a bride for their grown-up children become incredibly hard.
For instance
, my cousin came to India all the way from the United State of America to find a bride and get married, as he found nearly impossible to connect with the
people
 abroad, emotionally because of his inaccurate
language
.
Secondly
, living in an unknown country is most of the time subjected to risky experiences due to failure in communication. A plethora of youngsters
find
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 it troublesome to search and get suitable jobs for them. Even for elderly individuals, it is a tedious and time-consuming activity when it comes to shopping,
such
 as purchasing groceries. Apart from
this
, availing
healthcare
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 facilities is
also
 a huge problem for non-native citizens.
For example
, Mr Singh, my neighbour shared his experience with me, a time when he was totally unable to communicate with
people
 around him, that he was suffering from excruciating chest pain. He found it crucially difficult to get some help until he fainted. In conclusion, human is a social animal and
language
 is one of the most significant aspects of day to day life.
Hence
, I completely agree with the fact that lack of it can cause hazardous issues while residing in a foreign nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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