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Increasing number of students are going to university instead of working after high school. Discuss the advantage and disadvantage for young people who do this.

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Education
 is very important in everyone
life
 as it
provide
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 us knowledge and valuable lesson of
life
. Nowadays more and more students are opting for higher
education
 rather than doing
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the job
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job
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.In
this
 essay ,I will discuss both the pros and cons of
this
 trend.
To begin
, students who
chooses
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choose
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 higher
education
 are more likely
succeed
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to succeed
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 in
life
. For example, a
university
 of California did a survey in which it was found that student who
choose
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chooses
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 go higher
education
 has 80
percent
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per cent
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 chance succeeding in
life
 .
In addition
 ,students who opt for
university
 lead to
increase
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 in postgraduate who will earn handsomely which in return help to boost the economy. On the other hand ,
beside
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 the upside of
this
 trajectory drawbacks cannot be undermined.
Firstly
, it put
financial
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a financial
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 burden on parents of
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a
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student who go
direct
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 from high school for
university
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a university
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 degree.
This
 is due to the fact that there is no break between the transition from school to
university
 .
Secondly
, a person who starts working at
early
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an early
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 age has less chance to
high income
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high-income
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 job because he
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doesn’t
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don’t
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won't
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 have any
university
 or any
skill
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skilled
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 course. If student start earning at
early
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an early
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 age it
provide
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provides
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 financial benefit to the
familu
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family
 To conclude, it is clear that
student’s
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a student’s
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 decision to acquire a
university
 degree
is has
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 both merits and demerits
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