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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
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people
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believe
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believe
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 that learning a new
language
 is for
traveling
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 or immigrating purposes.
However
, some resist that, learning a foreign
language
 have different reasons and it is not only for working and studying goals.
This
 essay will discuss both ideas. In my idea, I agree with the
second
 group. Each year, there
are
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lof
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 of immigrants and tourists
travel
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who travel
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 to
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development
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 countries. It is necessary to know some basic structures of those
countires
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countries
 languages in order to have short conversations with them.
Therefore
, foreign visitors start to learn
local
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language
 to make connections with locals and get close to
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a new
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culture
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cultures
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. To summarize, studying
language
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the language
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 to have an easier accommodation is a mandatory skill to have.
On the other hand
, many believe that moving to another
country
 can't be the only reason
of
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 learning languages. Some
people
 learn a different
language
 because of their
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religion
 or geographical state in a
country
.
For instance
, Islamic
people
 learn to read Arabic because of their
islamic
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country
. Students in
this
country
 have to read Quran in
arabic
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 even if they don't want to learn a new
language
 but since it is a law they need to speak and read it fluently. To sum it up, humans don't learn a foreign
language
 because of
traveling
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 reasons. In conclusion, learning a different
language
 is a great skill to have, but some
people
 attempt to learn in order to take a trip and some learn it because of
necessity
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the necessity
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 of their
country
 rules. I strongly believe that there are different reasons to learn a
language
.
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