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Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Other believe that there are health benefits to living in cities.

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Some
people
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 feel that the
countryside
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 is more conducive to a healthy lifestyle than the city.
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, I believe that living in the city
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 encourages healthier activities. Those
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 claim
countryside
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are
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 greater that point out the access to superior nature is one of
advantages
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 when living in far from cities. They have many extensive lands to plant vegetables and raise animals.
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 called self-sufficiency. That model like that allows
people
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 many choices to eat from the various food sources.
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,
people
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 can enjoy the fresh air and quiet atmosphere in the
countryside
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 to separate from the crowded like the city. In the outskirts, individuals can spend time for outdoor activities, play sports, and work a more physically demanding job. All these things contribute to developing a more excellent condition of living.
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, there are many benefits of health when
people
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 are living in cities.
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, they can access many facilities
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 as gym rooms and yoga groups to find
people
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 who have similar hobbies to do exercises together.
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, residents in the apartments can use their balconies to decorate like a small garden or use the space in the house to plant more trees.
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, my colleague has a small space in her flat used for growing tomatoes and other vegetables, which makes her have a salad bowl every day. In conclusion, there are many ways to start a healthy lifestyle when living in cities.
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,
people
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 do not need to go back to the
countryside
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 to have a life like that.
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