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More and more business training and business meetings are taking place online rather than face-to-face. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the majority of companies prefer to organize training and meetings on the internet
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 of face-to-face. I believe that the positive effects prevail over the negative effects. On the one hand, it seems undeniable that some
employees
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 are unable to focus well on their
work
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 since they need to sit in front of a computer screen for long periods of
time
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. The leader cannot even confirm occasionally that whether the employee is listening carefully to the meeting.
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, when conducting a web conference,
work
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 can be much less efficient, and the crisis is threatening to bring the economy to a standstill.
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，staring at the computer screen for a long
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 can cause some diseases,
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 as myopia, dry eye, etc.
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,
employees
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' passion and
work
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 quality will both decline a lot. Whereas
work
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 opposite each other online is no longer a necessity with the development of the times
work
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, I take the view that reducing considerably
time
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 and cost.
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，it saves
employees
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 ‘commuting
time
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 since there
are
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 always an overcrowded population on the weekday morning.Thereby,which will help them
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 more and more productively and make greater contributions to the development of the company. Plus, leaders could create a flexible arrangement as workers telecommute at home,
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 can result in promoting better
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-life balance since they can immediately receive the information. It means
employees
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 have
time
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 to deal with their own affairs after getting off
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 and improve quality. In conclusion, numerous leaders choose to
work
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 through telecommuting ways to reduce
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, cost and balance life and
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although
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 it will create some issues and not make sure that every employee is working attentively.

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