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More and more business training and business meetings are taking place online rather than face-to-face. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the majority of companies prefer to organize training and meetings on the internet
instead
 of face-to-face. I believe that the positive effects prevail over the negative effects. On the one hand, it seems undeniable that some
employees
 are unable to focus well on their
work
 since they need to sit in front of a computer screen for long periods of
time
. The leader cannot even confirm occasionally that whether the employee is listening carefully to the meeting.
Consequently
, when conducting a web conference,
work
 can be much less efficient, and the crisis is threatening to bring the economy to a standstill.
Moreover
，staring at the computer screen for a long
time
 can cause some diseases,
such
 as myopia, dry eye, etc.
As a result
,
employees
' passion and
work
 quality will both decline a lot. Whereas
work
 opposite each other online is no longer a necessity with the development of the times
work
, I take the view that reducing considerably
time
 and cost.
For instance
，it saves
employees
 ‘commuting
time
 since there
are
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 always an overcrowded population on the weekday morning.Thereby,which will help them
work
 more and more productively and make greater contributions to the development of the company. Plus, leaders could create a flexible arrangement as workers telecommute at home,
it
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 can result in promoting better
work
-life balance since they can immediately receive the information. It means
employees
 have
time
 to deal with their own affairs after getting off
work
 and improve quality. In conclusion, numerous leaders choose to
work
 through telecommuting ways to reduce
time
, cost and balance life and
work
although
 it will create some issues and not make sure that every employee is working attentively.
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