There is an increasing amount of advertising directed at children, encouraging them to buy toys and snacks. Many parents are worried that these advertisements put too much pressure on children, while some advertisements claim that they provide useful information to children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In today’s globalized world, many advertising companies direct their content to the younger age of the community to encourage them to buy toys and snacks.
This
trend has numerous drawbacks as parents claim and expressed which will be reviewed in
Linking Words
this
essay.
In terms of benefits that impact the company are various, Linking Words
moreover
, the companies that are targeting children assume that they are easy prey among different ages of citizens by selling attractive trendy products and becoming more popular by attracting
Linking Words
this
age group of the public. Linking Words
On the other hand
, is to climb their income more dramatically.
The negative aspect of the trend is that parents claim that getting unhealthy food as snacks which can adversely affect children’s health contains a huge number of preservatives and non-organic colours Linking Words
as well as
a large magnitude of sugar considered a harmful substance nowadays Linking Words
due to
its direct relation to serious diseases and money spent on unnecessary things as toys.
My opinion, I agree with the parents' view Linking Words
due to
the recognizable effects of unhealthy snacks Linking Words
while
a massive number of studies support and show the negative impacts on individual's health especially the small age batch of the community because they can not differentiate and correlate between harms and benefits, Linking Words
furthermore
, the researches depict the large number of diseases that can hit the child as diabetes is the top illness followed by cardiovascular diseases and teeth caries which can affect the quality of life.
Linking Words
To conclude
, the family monitoring their child and guiding them is considered a crucial role by explaining what are the good things and contrivers for a couple of inquiries one to protect their babies from any medical issues and to save money pocket by directing them toward more educational and valuable toys.Linking Words
Submitted by shmoukhalghumaiz on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
task achievement
Ensure that each idea introduced is fully developed with sufficient explanation and examples. This will improve clarity and demonstrate a thorough understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Try to make clearer distinctions between the benefits and drawbacks. Present these ideas in separate, coherent paragraphs to better guide the reader.
coherence cohesion
The essay presents an introduction and a conclusion, providing a clear framework for the discussion, which is good for coherence.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion and provide reasoning for your viewpoint, supported by studies which is good for task response.
Fully explain your ideas
To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).
For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.