Some people think that everyone has the right to have access to university education and that the government should make it free for all students no matter what financial background they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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It is true that some commentators argue that everyone
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the right to access to
university
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education, and authorities should make it free no matter what their financial background. I completely disagree with
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point of view, despite some arguments for doing so. On the one hand, there are some reasons why local and national authorities should allocate
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resources
to help youngsters to continue their studies at
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, family backgrounds should be considered. Poor families cannot afford to let their children go to
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for higher education, and they must leave school and start to earn money to contribute to family income.
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, people who can not afford to continue to study
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can be excluded from well-paid careers
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as doctors, engineers and teachers. Because of
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,
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social inequality
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perpetuates
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,
goverments
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governments
government
should allocate resources to provide all children
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equal chance to pursue their academic studies at
university
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.
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, I believe that the
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government
governments
should not make it free no matter what their financial background. The
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reason is that people from rich families can afford to pay their tuition fees and their
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maintenance
during their studies.
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, it is
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that the governments should pay all the fees for their students. Another reason is that parents should spend money on key fields, including the environment and health care. In
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conclusion
, I disagree with those who believe that every person
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a right
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education.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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