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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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In recent years, some cities bought a home more than hiring apartments is so necessary for the workers. In my opinion, owning a house is the best way and safe for the owners. One of the heated issues is some individuals are renting a flat because they do not have money enough to buy a house and the hearths are more expensive than a renting studio.
That is
 maybe true but, if they are spending the banks for a house by installing, they can hold their building.
For example
, they can make installing to pay for a home in America that they can be an owner.
Nevertheless
, holding a studio is many positive ways. It is generally excepted that some workers may believe that hiring an apartment is comfortable for one to two guys and
that is
 enough space for them to live.
On the other hand
, having some buildings is important for some families that they are having many kids, that helps a lot of problems. To illustrate, the sound of the children will be loud at home when they are crying
therefore
,
that is
 not disturbing the other owners if they buy a habitation because it is privately for them. All in all, spending money
for
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 habitation is important for some workers who are need to be comfortable in the city.
In contrast
, some individuals need some places to be private. From my perspective, buys a building is more advantages than disadvantages
although
, it is might far away from the town.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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