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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people feel that paparazzi should not follow celebrities and invade their privacy by taking pictures of them everywhere, while others believe this is just the price of fame. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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While a number of
people
 argue paparazzi should not be tolerated and many more think the fancy crowd are paying price for their fame. In my opinion, it is better if we don't disturb the
privacy
 On one side of the argument, there is a community that strongly supports the
privacy
 of public figures to the fact it is the most worrying concern for them in modern life.
People
 like movie stars, athletes, pop singers etc. have all their eyes upon them round the clock. Recent CNN news aired a program that defines the percentage of
celebrities
 going into depression due to not having their personal life.
For example
, following Cricket players, spying on actors and actresses, escorting politicians might make them feel insecure because their private matters may go out viral in the public. There are circumstances when film actors are committed suicide because of leaked private photos on the internet,
this
 proves how sensitive
privacy
 is for
celebrities
. Despite the above arguments, a number of groups argue that
celebrities
 are paying price for having craze in the public. A society is always focused on the buzz created by
celebrities
.
People
 are having fame and glory will cash
this
 advantage to promote several multinational brands. well-known persons want the public to follow them always if not their craze in society may fade out.
For example
, creating accounts on social networks, attending public gatherings, social events etc. all help them to come into the limelight so
people
 and media follow. In conclusion, while both views are commonly held in society, I believe that a celebrity's
privacy
 is equal to the common man
privacy
, it is recommended paparazzi is not fun beyond the limits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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