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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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To begin
 with, some
people
 believe that
people
 will
use
 lesser
cars
 than
present
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. I personally, disagree with
these opinion
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these opinions
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,
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 and feel the
use
 of vehicles will increase. I consider
aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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 way for two
reason
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reasons
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 that I will explore in the ensuing essay.
First
 of all, the population and
there
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awarness
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awareness
 of finance is increase day by day, the demand and
use
 of
cars
also
 increasing, and will increase
farther
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further
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 in some decades.
For instance
, in
this
 age,
world
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the world
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 facing a bust of population, which lifting the prices of necessity.
Consequently
,
people
 are becoming more
concern
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on
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about
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there
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their
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 cost, to minimize
trasportation
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transportation
cost
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costs
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 like others, they searching the way for reducing
it
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them
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.
This
 same type of phenomenon
also
 influence me and my close
freinds
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friends
 to buy
cars
; we see that most of
the
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our colleague
also
 using own vehicles. In light of the foregoing, I believe
people
 will
use
 more vehicles in twenty years than
present
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the present
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.
Secondly
,
pople
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people
 are now becoming richer than
past
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in past
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 which making
a
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an
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influencial
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influential
 reason for increasing
cars
 in future, my personal experience is a compelling illustration of
this
.
For example
, ten to
tweleve
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twelve
 years ago, in our area
this
 very small amount of vehicle, I found owned by
people
 because most of them cannot afford it. But in recent times, civilians have lot of
weath
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wealth
 than past, in
this
conseqeunce
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consequence
, I found that almost every
familyowning
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family owning
 a personal
trasport
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transport
. To sum up,
civilian
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civilians
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 will own more
car
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cars
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 than
this
 time, because
people
number
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numbers
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 will lift up, and they
also
 become
more rich
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richer
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.
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