Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

To begin
with, some
people
believe that
people
will
use
lesser
cars
than
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. I personally, disagree with
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,
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and feel the
use
of vehicles will increase. I consider
aforementioned
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way for two
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that I will explore in the ensuing essay.
First
of all, the population and
there
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awarness
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awareness
of finance is increase day by day, the demand and
use
of
cars
also
increasing, and will increase
farther
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further
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in some decades.
For instance
, in
this
age,
world
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the world
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facing a bust of population, which lifting the prices of necessity.
Consequently
,
people
are becoming more
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on
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there
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their
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cost, to minimize
trasportation
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transportation
cost
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costs
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like others, they searching the way for reducing
it
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.
This
same type of phenomenon
also
influence me and my close
freinds
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friends
to buy
cars
; we see that most of
the
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our colleague
also
using own vehicles. In light of the foregoing, I believe
people
will
use
more vehicles in twenty years than
present
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the present
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.
Secondly
,
pople
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people
are now becoming richer than
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in past
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which making
a
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influencial
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influential
reason for increasing
cars
in future, my personal experience is a compelling illustration of
this
.
For example
, ten to
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twelve
years ago, in our area
this
very small amount of vehicle, I found owned by
people
because most of them cannot afford it. But in recent times, civilians have lot of
weath
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wealth
than past, in
this
conseqeunce
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consequence
, I found that almost every
familyowning
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family owning
a personal
trasport
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transport
. To sum up,
civilian
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will own more
car
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cars
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than
this
time, because
people
number
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numbers
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will lift up, and they
also
become
more rich
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richer
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.
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