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Modern lifestyle is completely different from the way people lived in the past. Some people think that the changes have been very positive while some others believe they have negative.

#lifestyle #people #changes
People
's
lifestyle
 is changing tremendously in each year.
People
 shape their
life
pattern
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patterns
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 with regard to the emerging trends of
the
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society. Some
people
 uphold it as a positive trend, while others have reservations about it. In my opinion,
modern
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lifestyle
 poses more disadvantages than advantages. On the one hand, there are some merits due to the advent of a new style of
life
.
Firstly
, in today’s
life
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people
 accept the
life
pattern
 which is convenient. Since there are troves of resources or choices to adapt, they absorb the most suitable version so they feel more comfortable.
Moreover
, the modern
lifestyle
 has several facilities which reduce physical workload and make their duty easier.
As a result
, the community adopts these technologies to assist them in their daily chores.
In addition
 to it, it is very
time saving
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. Nowadays ‘time became
money’
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,
hence
the
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society feels these changes as a blessing to survive in
this
 competitive world.
On the other hand
, there are several arguments to encounter its merits.
Firstly
, changes in
lifestyle
 have pernicious influences on our health. To make it clear, new food habits like fast foods, persevered foods, soft drinks etc are the primary cause of deadly diseases like cancer.
Also
,
sedentary
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lifestyle
 and lack of physical activity leads to obesity and ends up in diseases like diabetes mellitus, hypertension etc.
In addition
, round the clock use of modern devices like mobile phones, computers internets etc affect the human body due to
radiations
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. Another important factor is that there is reduced interaction and communication in the family compared to the past. Since both parents are working with different shift hours, they did not get time to meet each other, and no time to talk with children.
Thus
 they lead a machinery
life
 rather than
family
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life
. In fact, we can say that parents are failures to mould a child especially the personality and overall development.
In addition
, new generations lack our values, customs, cultures etc due to the introduction of other modern styles.
Thus
, they adopt other customs or values which are convenient without considering
its
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 drawbacks. To sum up, it is proved beyond doubt that new style of
life
pattern
 has more negative impact than positive change. We should use our prudence and discernment while adopting any changes in our
life
pattern
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 and not be swayed by its vast benefits.
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