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In some cities people are choosing cars instead of bicycles, while in other cities riding bikes is replacing cars. why is this the case? which development do you think this better?

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First
, driving a car is more convenient and comfortable than cycling.
Therefore
, when going to workplaces or hanging out with friends, the car is a reasonable choice. The other reason for
this
 point is when compared with vehicles like cars or motorbikes; cycling is not time effective.
For instance
, with the same distance, it would take drivers double or triple faster than bicycle riders. It is
also
 true that riding bikes becoming increasingly popular in some urban areas. Due to exhaust fumes from cars, which may have a devastating effect on the planet and lead to global warming, cycling might be expected to cut down emissions.
Also
, Riding a bike is essential for health not only maintain a healthy body but
also
 reduce the risk of some diseases
such
 as cancer, diabetes and heart diseases. In conclusion, these points have both pros and cons depends on the urban citizen view. In my opinion,
although
 there are several benefits of driving a car, I would argue that cycling is a greater choice and it should be encouraged by the urban authorities.
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