3i. #Work | #Travel - In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantage of young people who decide to do this. (IELTS , AC)

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before starting a

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can change the entire life of

students

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, which some teenagers prefer to break studying for a

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to gain invaluable experiences to work or travel during the interval, whereas others

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consideration is knowing yourself. Despite studying in a

university

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for 3 years, some

students

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may not know their real intention and what to do for living in the future.

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, working before

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university

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entrance is a great opportunity to find your

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fields of study and jobs.

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, it can provide the working experience, which can be the profile for

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a

job

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, prestigious companies always search for the graduate, who have

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experience at least one

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reason, if they have ever worked or done an internship, they will have a better chance to get recruited compared to those without working experience.

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, there are some cons

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breaking a school for a

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Students

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will delay their learning for a

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too.

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of spending 4 years

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graduating

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university

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, and can start doing

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a job

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job

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early, they will graduate later than

students

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who immediately start

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university

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, in order to work or travel for a

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, a massive amount of budget

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to be spent including living and

traveling

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costs.

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, for

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in Japan for a

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, I needed to spent approximately 120,000 baht for

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trip, which you can afford

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small

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with

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price. In conclusion,

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working or

traveling

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travelling

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before going to a

university

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for a

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will cost

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enormous amount of money, and delay your graduation, it is worthwhile to do because it provides unforgettable moments to know yourself, and

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opportunity for

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a dream

job

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