3i. #Work | #Travel - In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantage of young people who decide to do this. (IELTS , AC)

A
year
before starting a
university
can change the entire life of
students
, which some teenagers prefer to break studying for a
year
to gain invaluable experiences to work or travel during the interval, whereas others
agrue
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agree
that it wastes money and time for studying. In
this
essay, I will provide the benefits and the drawbacks of the statement, and present my perspective toward
this
. The
first
pro that we need to take into
a
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consideration is knowing yourself. Despite studying in a
university
for 3 years, some
students
may not know their real intention and what to do for living in the future.
Therefore
, working before
an
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university
entrance is a great opportunity to find your
favorite
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fields of study and jobs.
Moreover
, it can provide the working experience, which can be the profile for
applying
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a
job
.
For example
, prestigious companies always search for the graduate, who have
job
experience at least one
year
. For
this
reason, if they have ever worked or done an internship, they will have a better chance to get recruited compared to those without working experience.
However
, there are some cons
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breaking a school for a
year
.
Students
will delay their learning for a
year
too.
Instead
of spending 4 years
for
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graduating
a
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university
, and can start doing
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job
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early, they will graduate later than
students
who immediately start
a
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university
.
Furthermore
, in order to work or travel for a
year
, a massive amount of budget
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to be spent including living and
traveling
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costs.
For instance
, for
internship
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an internship
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in Japan for a
year
, I needed to spent approximately 120,000 baht for
this
trip, which you can afford
an
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small
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with
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this
price. In conclusion,
although
working or
traveling
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before going to a
university
for a
year
will cost
a
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enormous amount of money, and delay your graduation, it is worthwhile to do because it provides unforgettable moments to know yourself, and
better
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opportunity for
applying
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a dream
job
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