In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing, and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems? What measures could be taken to solve them?
In some
countries
the average weight of Add a comma
,countries
people
is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems? What measures could be taken to solve the
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apply
.
Change the punctuation
?
Obesity
is the main cause of health problems due to overweight
Add a missing verb
being overweight
one
could may
suffer joint pain, diabetes and other serious diseases like heart problems and other health conditions. Why Remove a modal verb
apply
people
weight is increasing due Change noun form
people's
personal
diet, lack of Change preposition
to personal
activities
, one
should take his/her life seriously. Making activities
is the only way to overcome one
's obesity
.
The main problem
of weight increasing
is Replace the word
increase
limitations
of our Correct article usage
the limitations
activities
, some
Correct pronoun usage
which some
people
face due to their inheritance problem
and some may due to underlying diseases. People
suffering from this
condition is
due to the lack of physical Unnecessary verb
apply
activities
and habit
of eating junk unhealthy Correct article usage
the habit
food
. Obesity
is the
major Correct article usage
a
problem
and it is the main risk factor of
heart Change preposition
for
diseases
and strokes. Fix the agreement mistake
disease
However
, some may have to spend their whole day
on chair
in Add an article
a chair
office
it cannot burn Correct article usage
the office
our
Change the word
the
calories
only store
in our Replace the word
stored
body
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bodies
moreover
we still need some energy to do work so, consume more calories
rather than burning it
.
Making physical Correct pronoun usage
them
activities
is the only way to control obesity
. And another way is to use less
consumption of Correct quantifier usage
fewer
calories
and unhealthy food
. We should focus on our lifestyles and eating habits. We should focus on our calories
intake we should prefer healthy Change the noun form
calorie
food
rather than unhealthy food
moreover
go to daily exercise which keep
Change the verb form
keeps
them
healthy. If your office work is on the chair Correct pronoun usage
us
whole
Correct article usage
the whole
day
so one
should take Correct pronoun usage
you
less
Change the quantifier
fewer
calories
diet. The most important thing Is
to prevent Unnecessary verb
apply
obesity
are
eating healthy Correct subject-verb agreement
is
food
, regular
Add a missing verb
doing regular
exercises
and Fix the agreement mistake
exercise
reduced
limited movements.
In conclusion, Wrong verb form
reducing
obesity
is the main problem
over the last
decades and increasing day
by day
it is only can reduce by healthy eating and lifestyles
.Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyle
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