Most people have forgotten the meaning behind traditional or religious festivals; during festival periods, people nowadays only want to enjoy themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

These days, many
people
are not conscious about the true meaning of their cultural or religious
events
,
people
just enjoy the festivals. I totally disagree with
this
opinion since knowing the meaning makes the festival still remaining.
To begin
with, a lot of
people
seem to be knowing the background of the local
events
because they were taught by teachers or their parents who can convey the correct information
of
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the festivals to their
offsprings
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. They not only enjoy the traditional
events
but
also
believe and respect genuine meaning.
For instance
, Thailand has
Song
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the Song

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Kran festival in which
people
trust it to splash water in order to apologize to the local god of the river and they
also
go back to their grandparents for receiving the blessing.
As a result
people
still know the exact meaning and believe in the stories.
On the other hand
, if
people
do not know the meaning and stories which is the origin of
events
, they will not delight in the festivals and it may
be disappear
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from the countries. To compare with games that do not have the story or the player do not know the main point of games, nowadays it still
have
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the old carnival that it means new generation
people
still have conservation the culture.
For example
, a lot of
people
in local India do not protect their old
events
such
as
Holola
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the Holola

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festival. Since they do not enjoy
and
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it and

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they
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apply

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do not know the exact meaning.
That is
why
this
festival vanishes from India. In conclusion, I completely disagree that
people
do not define the meaning of their own cultural
events
that are involved with their behaviour and religion.
Therefore
, the festival can be remained by
people
who trust and know the real meaning.
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