Write a letter to the enrollment officer in a college requesting an exception for joining

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Dear Mr. Xubair, Hope you are doing well, I am writing
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letter to apply for the computer science program,
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offered in the college notice board. I am a little bit concerned about the requirements for enrollment. I heard that
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particular
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offered some advanced topics, and it attracted me a lot, because of that reason I am keen to join that
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. But when I tried to apply for that
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, it showed me that I needed 4.5 out of 5 for my second exam. Unfortunately for some reason, my grade is not good, it's 4 out of 5. So is there any way I can admit
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subject? It will be very helpful if there are some exceptions for joining. One additional thing I need to address to you is that I already completed basic computer learning, so for my better learning the advanced programme will help me a lot in my career and I assure you that I will seriously participate in
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course
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. I would appreciate it if you could look into
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matter at your convenience time. Yours sincerely, Sudipta Ghosh
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logical structure
Ensure that the letter has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The current structure could be improved for better clarity and logical flow.
greeting and closing
Use a more formal and consistent salutation and closing. While 'Yours sincerely' is suitable, it would be better to address the recipient with a consistent level of formality throughout.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph should focus on a single idea or request. Your paragraphs tended to mix several points, which can confuse the reader. Separate your concerns clearly.
complete response
The response addresses the task at hand, but ensure that you are directly responding to the task's specific requirements.
suitable writing tone
While the tone is mostly suitable, some parts of the letter could be perceived as informal. Aim for a tone that is consistently formal and respectful.
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