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Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is an irrefutable fact that
discipline
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 at schools facilitates the development of juveniles. While disruptive
behaviour
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 can detrimentally affect academic achievements. A segment of society is convinced that
parents
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 should take ultimate responsibility for the
discipline
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 of their adolescents. Others,
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, believe that it should be the role of
teachers
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. The following paragraphs will discuss both opinions and explain why
parents
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 should be largely responsible in
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 matter. On the one hand,
children
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 spend a considerable part of their day at school and since
discipline
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 is crucial, it would be reasonable to expect
teachers
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 to allocate some time to develop good manners in students.
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, it is easier for
teachers
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 to
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 adolescents, because
children
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 are usually afraid of getting punished.
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, if students know that they can get poor scores or even can be excluded from the learning process;
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, will more likely mind their
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 at school, and over time it will turn into a good habit.
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,
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 is a complex phenomenon, it is not only behaving well during the lessons but, it is
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 about being systematic and obeying given rules at home, in public places, and etc. Since
children
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 spend more time with their
parents
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, even before going to school,
parents
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 should take the main responsibility for the ethical
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 of their juveniles.
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,
children
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 take their
parents
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 as role models and pick up bad habits mostly from them. And they can repeat the same
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 at schools.
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, if
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 enforce strict rules at home, juveniles will behave well everywhere and,
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, become valuable members of society in the future. To conclude, I believe that
parents
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 should play the main role in disciplining their younger ones. The character of
teachers
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 should not be ignored.
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