In some countries, parents expect children to spend a long time studying in and after school and have less free time. Do you think it has positive or negative effects on children and the society that they live in?

It is hard to deny that we are living in a society with

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increasing competition, which imposes exceeding pressure on citizens even in their early stages of life.

Such

a phenomenon leads to an assumption of parents that their offspring should spend a long

time

in study.

However

, as for as the definition of

happiness

, societal well-being, and efficiency are concerned, I firmly believe it is negative to both

children

and our society.

First

and foremost. Regarding studying performance as the only priority of

happiness

is biased and unpersuasive, especially for parents, whose ultimate aim is to see their

next

generation leading a healthy and happy life.

Nevertheless

, exceedingly long studying hours and limited leisure

time

undoubtedly compromise adolescents’ physical and mental development.

This

is because the

time

which is supposed to be spent on sports, art, and other extra-curricular activities has been engulfed, and those events are viewed as an indispensable process in cultivating youngsters’ character. To

this

end, the

children

will never experience real

happiness

for the rest of their life.

Furthermore

, the irrational expectations of parents tend to raise a passive social narrative. Take the case of China as an example, where

children

are supposed to learn as much as possible even when they are in kindergarten. Influenced by the wild spread narrative, every single child has no choice but to be involved in

this

competition and bear heavy peer pressure, which undermines their aspiration to the future. Had they not been exhausted in their early ages, they would never have been loose anticipation and ambitions in their future.

Nevertheless

, a voice may raise that only through long studying

time

can they compete in

this

fierce campaign. Ironically, the link between studying

time

and efficiency is missing in

this

assertion; it is the long studying period that declines the studying efficiency of students, due to their physical durability and mental resistance.

Conversely

, chances are that students perform equally well as long as they make full use of their studying

time

by enhancing effectiveness. In a nutshell, I maintain the idea that expecting

children

to

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too long can leave a negative influence on both

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and society

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considering real

happiness

, societal well-being, and learning effectiveness.