In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge
Some
people
think governments should construct more railways than roads
even if it costs more than building new highway roads
. Although
the railway
has some advantages, I would disagree with this
statement.
First
of all, I would like to write about my opinions on travelling by train. For passengers, it is comfortable to travel and costs less to buy tickets. But, for the government it costs too much to construct and take time to finish this
type of project, especially building in a vast and rocky place like Mongolia
which is my birth country. In Mongolia
, cities are long-distance from each other, and the population is only three million. So, the railway
projects will take time to regain the construction budget. Also
, following train timetables to travel is not flexible for customers who have urgent needs.
On the other hand
, driving our own car on the highway is suited to Mongolia
's condition. Also
, it wastes less money than the railway
and possible
to build in Add a missing verb
is possible
Add an article
the summer
Correct your spelling
summertime
summer time
, only for 3 months. Correct your spelling
summertime
For example
, two years ago, Mongolian
government had built a road to Khuvsgul Correct article usage
the Mongolian
lake
, which is one of the famous travel spots of Change the capitalization
Lake
Mongolia
, so many people
went there with their family
Fix the agreement mistake
families
by
their own Change preposition
in
car
. Fix the agreement mistake
cars
Also
, driving our own car gives us freedom
to stop whenever we need or go wherever we want. Add an article
the freedom
This
is the main reason to choose to drive on roads
.
In conclusion, the government's one of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
the
main duties and responsibilities is to create infrastructure to provide Correct article usage
apply
people
’s needs. To create that public sector should do research and spend less money as possible. So building roads
will continue unless people
possess cars. The railway
is used for some busy directions. Unfortunately, some people
should agree that not all places busy
like big cities.Add a missing verb
are busy
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
