two pie charts show the patterns of expenditure in the us between 1966 - 1996. summariese the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

two pie charts show the patterns of expenditure in the us between 1966 - 1996.

summariese the information by selecting and reporting  the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
the pie charts illustrate the changes in American patterns of output for 30 years between 1966 and 1996. food and cars made up the two biggest items of the figure during both
the
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years and together,they comprised well over half of the household
expense
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expenses
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. food accounted for 44% of the spending in 1966 ,but
this
came down sharply by
two thirds
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, to 14%,in 1966
however
, the outlay on cars almost doubled,rising from 23% in 1966 to 45% in 1996. spending on dining out doubled,rising from 7% to 14% .the proportion of
amount
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spent on operating computers increased dramatically to 10% in 1996 from 1% in 1966.
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computers
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expenditure rose , the percentage of outlay on books fell considerably from 6% to 1%. Americans spent approximately the same amount on petrol and furniture during both years.
to sum up
,increased amounts spent on cars, computers and eating out in 1966 were made by drops in expenditure on food and books in 1966.
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