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When choosing a job, salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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A decision to settle a new career is more complicated than imagine, there are several factors that individuals should consider which some
people
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 believe a wage is the priority to make any decision before agreeing with a new
job
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.
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, I strongly agree with the statement that wage is a crucial factor that directly affects the decision to accept a
job
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. Normally,
People
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 who find a new
job
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 are often facing a difficult situation while they are quite sure, not able to leave the circumstance.
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, they are attempting to change their current responsibility or even thinking to resign from their position. The majority of the reason that
people
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 who had resigned from ex-company was
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,
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 is the reason why an individual is selecting a new
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 is quite consider to
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 before other factors.
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,
People
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 think about new
income
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 should be more than the current approximately 30
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 because they have to get rid of stability in
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 become to new work which quite risky in monthly
income
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, the effects of changing to a new
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 are living
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such
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 as travelling
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, meal
costs
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, and even life insurance
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.
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 have to pay more fuel cost
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 of the distance from house to a new workplace is different.
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,
people
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 have to pay more for meal
costs
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 if the new place is located in a center of the capital province which meal
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 is often expensive than outside the centre. In conclusion,
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 essay definitely agrees with the statement that wages will be considered at
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 when
people
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 have to select a new career.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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