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Some people say that public libraries should be free; otherwise they are just a waste of money, especially because modern technologies and the Internet allow easy access to resources.​ Discuss and give your point of view.​

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Reading stories told through black ink on white paper is one of the favourite pastimes of most
people
. For the millions of
people
 around the world who love to read
books
,
libraries
 are an important place. Many individuals think that
people
 should have free access to
libraries
 and
books
 in it;
however
, others, including myself, believe that
people
 should pay for
libraries
. A number of advocates against paid
libraries
 believe that
this
 trend causes crisis to the
libraries
. If
book
 departments require payment for
books
 and a quiet place to read, the number of visitors decreases a lot and
people
 will start to read
books
 with the help of the internet where the free access to a lot of
books
 in electronic version can be found. Nowadays, the infamous coronavirus is still spreading across the globe and during the quarantine, many
book
 lovers could read quite a lot of
books
 at their home finding the online versions of them.
On the contrary
, the payment for the library gives the person not only access to any
book
 in that
book
 department
,
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 but
also
 the quiet place where that individual can read in peace.
Moreover
, if
person
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a person
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 is paying for the
book
,
this
 thing gains importance for the reader, as
this
 person does not want a waste of money. For these reasons, I strongly believe that
libraries
 should be paid. In conclusion, the fees for
libraries
 are worth the money paid.
Libraries
 have to charge money for
books
,
otherwise
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 the
books
 in them may lose value in the future.
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