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In most countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more available. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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The given topic is highly controversial .
However
 , If a glance is taken at the pros and cons of
this
 aspect , It is irrefutable to say that While , there are a lot of disadvantages of increase fast
food
 in many countries , advantages and
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 hereby give the following argument to support myself . Commencing with a
first
 and foremost point in the list of my knowledge is that
firstly
 If fast
food
 is becoming cheaper as compared the traditional
food
 .
Then
 , the masses can start to prefer more fast
food
 after they can forget traditional
food
 .
In addition
 to
this
 , they can face health-related diseases
such
 as heart diseases , stroke , obesity and diabetes and so on . Sometimes children like more fast
food
 and they cannot like to eat other
food
 . So , it affects children health .
For example
 , mind development issues and height growth issues so on . At
last
 , Some restaurants want to gain customers and they are using the chemical items in fast
food
 for the increasing tests
as a result
 effect on people health .
Thus
 ,
This
 type of cons of fast
food
 becomes cheaper .
Moreover
 , there are some pros associated with it as well
firstly
 , people can see two types rich and poor in all world . So , everyone can buy fast
food
 and they cannot live hungrily.
For instance
 , all gulf countries have fast
food
 at is cheaper price because their state says that everyone gets the
food
 . Poor masses cannot buy traditional
food
 because traditional
food
 is expensive as compared to fast
food
 . So , they cannot buy
food
 for daily basses .
Therefore
 ,
This
 type of pros . After analyzing the matter , it would be right to say that despite few advantages , disadvantages offer rank higher . Though people should avoid fast
food
 as result , they cannot face any complications in future .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Nutritional value
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Job creation
  • Disposable income
  • Culinary diversity
  • Processed foods
  • Economic stimulus
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Sustainable practices
  • Public health
  • Consumerism
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