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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for your advice on whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/ she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why she will not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea Suggest the type of job that would be suitable

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Dear Kinnari, First of all, congratulations on passing high school with
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 an outstanding score. I am really proud of you. I am sure you must have had a blast at your place. As a friend having slightly more experience than you, I would strongly suggest you take up a job now. One of the major reasons for
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 would be that the college education syllabus covers a vast range
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 subjects, some of which might not be useful to you in future as you have already decided to make a career in the IT Sector,
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, biology. Taking up these subjects won't help you add any value to your profile. You have been in love with coding ever since I have known you as a child. Getting a job at
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 early age will help you get a headstart and will give you the space to take additional risks where needed. I have a lot of friends working in IT startups in Bangalore, I can ask them to put in a word for you. You can join there as an intern. I am eager to hear back from you on
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. Maybe we could catch up in person as well. Lots of love, Nihal.

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Consider providing a specific example of how certain college subjects may not be beneficial for her career path. This will give your argument more depth and clarity.
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To enhance logical structure, you could explicitly mention the pros and cons in separate paragraphs for better clarity and flow.
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You have maintained a friendly and supportive tone throughout the letter, which is very suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing sections are warm and personalized, reinforcing the letter's friendly nature.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressures
  • financial burdens
  • tuition
  • student loans
  • uncertainty
  • work experience
  • earn money
  • practical skills
  • professional network
  • align with interests
  • growth opportunities
  • on-the-job training
  • apprenticeships
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