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Universities should accept equal number of male and female student in every subject

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The society and educational system have changed significantly since the old era where it was impossible for girls to study at university but boys were allowed to do so. Now the society has changed for the good and girls are allowed to get the education and they can enrol in any educational institution of their choice. I don’t agree with the opinion that universities should accept an equal number of male and female
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 in every
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.
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, the main aim of an educational institution is to educate the person and make them ready to lead the future of our country. But if we will put the discrimination in
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, how youngsters will lead the future of the country. If the
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 process prioritizes sentiments and starts taking the same number of
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 in every
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, it would not be a good idea for the future of the country. Even if there are more females in any stream but
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 should be done on basis of talent.
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,
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 should be done mainly on the basis of academic progress and merit. If male and female
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 are forced to accept the same
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 it will be the whimsical idea that would deprive many talented male
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. Again education should be given according to youngster’s choice and their wish if we forced them to accept equal
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 they will be deprived of learning their area of an interesting
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 and they will never perform well in academics. They will lose the freedom of choosing their own
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 and dream. In conclusion, it should be the main aim of educational institutions to give full freedom to
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 to choose their subjects. The idea of universities accepting the same number of male and female
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 is not good and the
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 process should be strictly based on academic progress and merit.
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