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3.) Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Discuss both reviews and give on opinion.

#people #cities #place #area #reviews
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Living in the
cities
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 and in the countryside has a different good and bad perception.
People
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 might prefer to live based on their opinion and necessity.
The both
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 sides of these ideas will be discussed
following
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in
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the
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detail below. First of all, one of the most obvious
advantage
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advantages
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 of the rural area is a slow and flexible life. There is no need to be rushed
on
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in
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 the morning or evening, the work
has
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 not that
much
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apply
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competitive and
lower
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has lower
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 pressure than
the
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in the
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cities
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.
Moreover
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, the
people
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 and the
neighbors
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neighbours
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 are much more friendly to each other,
kindness
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and kindness
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 and empathy are around the society.
For instance
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,
according to
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 a recent study from the Faculty of
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Economics
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, at Harvard University, 8 of 10
people
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welling
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willing
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 to help their
neighbors
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neighbours
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 or the
people
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 in the community with no return.
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 the
other’s
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other
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hands
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hand
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, the
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cities
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city's
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 life has
much
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many
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 more opportunities to grow
for
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apply
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the
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a
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carrier
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career
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. Some
people
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 prefer to live in the
crowed
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crowded
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city
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 to find a better job and a good
carrier
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career
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 path because a lot of
the
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well-known
company
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companies
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 almost located in big
cites
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cities
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.
Furthermore
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, the public transportation in the
city
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 is so convenient compared to the countryside, the young
people
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 having no
personal’s
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personal
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 car
be
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are
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 able to
traveling
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travel
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 around
for
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to
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 live their
live
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. To illustrate
this
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, a survey recently conducted by
a
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the
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 New York
time
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show
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 that most
of
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a
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fresh
graduated
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prefers
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 to live in
the
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a
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 big
city
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 to find a better future.
To conclude
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, both
of
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cities
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 live and
country
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the country
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 has their own advantages. For my self, I love to work and spend my life in the
city
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 because of my ambition. It may
hard
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be hard
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 to find the peach but the young should learn and develop themselves which is cannot
find
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 in
the
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apply
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rural
area
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areas
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.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly into the next for improved coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Include more specific examples to support your points more comprehensively.
introduction
The introduction is clear and briefly presents both sides of the argument.
conclusion
The conclusion provides a personal opinion, effectively summarizing the main points.
task response
Addresses both sides of the argument, showing a balanced understanding.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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