You and a friend have both been accepted to a study abroad program in Paris, France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: •Congratulate him/her for also being accepted •Ask him/her if he/she would like to be your roommate •Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together
Dear Jane,
Finally
, We made it! Just like mine, I learnt that your admission letter also
came in earlier this
morning. I really want to say a huge congratulations to you on this
great news. Now, we can boldly say that all our efforts and sleepless nights studying were not wasted.
By the way, I have been looking for some on-campus accommodations, and after several searches, I found a relatively cheap and decent one. However
, it is a shared apartment, therefore
, I would need a roommate. So, I would love to know if you would be interested in being my roommate. If yes, kindly let me know on time in order to be able to inform the house agent appropriately.
Although
we have shared so many things in common in the past, I believe we can have more lovely experiences living together while
studying. We could plan occasional holiday trips to Spain or Dubai during the summer. On some weekends, girls-only dinner dates wouldn't be a bad idea either. More importantly, studying together in the library and sharing ideas would be a perfect way to learn for us. I believe with all these, our stay during the program will definitely be memorable.
I look forward to hearing from you again.
Warm regards,
Janet.Submitted by peteromisakin on
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coherence cohesion
You've done a fantastic job of clearly structuring your letter. To take it to the next level, consider using a few more transitional phrases to ensure a smoother flow between your ideas.
task achievement
Your task achievement is strong, as you've covered all the required points effectively. To improve, you could add a bit more detail about the shared accommodation or the activities you plan to do together.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are very warm and appropriate, making your letter feel both friendly and formal.
task achievement
The tone of your letter is very suitable for the context and audience. It's friendly, encouraging, and enthusiastic.