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Why Torurist visit the museum but loacal people dont visit and what can be done to attract moe people in museum

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Introduction
Museums are historical places, we can preserve the memories of our ancestors so that they can be very useful for our
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 generations. But nowadays only tourists
visit
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 these places and hardly local residence visits, for that there are so many reasons.
Body paragraph 1
There are different types of museums but, in
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 paragraph, I will cover only the
museum
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 which has ancient
things
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 that are hardly available to see in our daily life,
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, Maharana Pratap’s sword was 56 kg in weight, but nowadays the weight of the sword is hardly 5 kgs.There are different kinds of
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 which are very valuable. These museums are located in different cities and in suburban areas, as said that local
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 rarely
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 the
museum
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 and only most of the travellers or tourists
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 the
museum
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, the new hungry
people
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 always collect
museum
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-related data and the
people
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 who work on historical subjects,
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 collect maximum information about the ancient
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. Because local
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 stay in the same suburban area, and they probably have most the information related to the
museum
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things
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, and other hand tourists are new every time
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, therefore,
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 it seems tourist
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 the
museum
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 but local
people
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 does not and I do not agree with it.
Conclusion
To attract more
people
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 to the
museum
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, there are several ways,
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, “Prime Minter Narendra Modi” has inaugurated the statue of unity it is the biggest statue in the world, it has different representational
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 and media that explain everything very simple ,and 3D as well as 5D manner.
People
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 have good food and for relaxation, there are different staying facilities are there. I would suggest modernising our
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 in
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 a way that
people
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 love to
visit
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 every time.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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