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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?(Advantages and Disadvantages)

It is thought by some people that ,suggesting
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 do anything with perseverance always leads them to fruitful outcomes.
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idea
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. To commence, It is important to develop persistency at an early age in order to have a self-esteem and confidence mindset.If
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 do not have the habit of hard
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 , they will struggle in future.That's why it is a good
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 to advise
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 to do hard
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 in order to succeed in life .
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,It could take the
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 one step forward in their career if they try hard.
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 have the capability to learn anything if they have proper guidance.
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 who have been taught good time management with their studies are always able to fulfil any deadline related tasks in their corresponding job fields.
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,too much hard-working
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 sometimes has detrimental effects on the child.
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,It is possible to mislead the child with the
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 of a hard-working mentality.
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 is because only hard
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 can not always get a successful life.Sometimes,It is difficult to get success without having a genuine passion for the
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 .
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, it is not a good
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 to always instruct
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 to do anything with hard
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.Another important thing to remember,If
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 do not have routine life that could arise
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 physical and mental problems.
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 , research published by the new york times states that,A large number of
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 having sleeping problems as well as concomitant depression because of their working behaviour. To conclude,advising
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 to hard
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 to gain anything has
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 merits and demerit consequences .While it helps
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 to gain self-confidence and a successful career,But false promising and problems related to
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 mental and physical
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 advice

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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